With all the jazz and crowd.
It had the mood, the moves
And the music played loud.
High, the party was all set,
With all the jazz and crowd.
He passed by her amidst all,
His hand slid across her body.
Unintentional, made them exchange a look
No lewd, but it was gaudy.
She gestured him with a finger
Dint realize, he went with the sway.
Gave her a hand, pulled her close
Dunno if it was meant to be this way!
Soon they got real intimate
He kissed her forehead, her lips
Fiddled with her bra-strap
His hands coaxed her body, her hips.
Now maybe she's just being normal,
Or she's just in a mindless daze.
It might've felt like a naive little mouse,
Finding its way through a complicated maze.
And the music played loud.
High, the party was all set,
With all the jazz and crowd.
He passed by her amidst all,
His hand slid across her body.
Unintentional, made them exchange a look
No lewd, but it was gaudy.
She gestured him with a finger
Dint realize, he went with the sway.
Gave her a hand, pulled her close
Dunno if it was meant to be this way!
Soon they got real intimate
He kissed her forehead, her lips
Fiddled with her bra-strap
His hands coaxed her body, her hips.
Now maybe she's just being normal,
Or she's just in a mindless daze.
It might've felt like a naive little mouse,
Finding its way through a complicated maze.
posted by SAL at 4/04/2006 11:17:00 PM
14 Comments:
getting inspiration from such events ! .. nice one :)
U ROCK!!!!
i wud still rate, shreya's poem better thn this...but this also is too good ;)
aaj subah thoda late hua, isliye chai ke saath nahi padh saka...reading it in office now. :)
@Vivek: Any event can be converted to poetry buddy...! :P
@Sumedh: Yup, shreya's poem was & is a classic... cant even compare :) Newy, Thanx :)
to me the first three paras beautifully portrays a sexy move while doing tango....but than I never fiddle with bra-strap while dancing, so I got lost :P
Nice!
Nice two liners for the ending buds :P
@vikas: I guess, it doesnt always turn out how u interpret it! In poetic language its called - building up the mood, b4 walking into the climax. Ab bhi nahi samjha? An analogy - its like visualizing/setting up the scene before taking the picture; in terms of photography!
Newy, Thanx :)
@gIftoFwIngs: Yup, left it for imagination :)
aah!! a poet find's her muse in anything n everything...liked it..kinda funny and a bit sexy :)
whew, last time i tried that i got one tight slap! hehe, just kidding.. nice one there :-)
you should try something original... both theme and words
@ss: humm...! ;)
@The Outlaw Torn: Watchout! ;) newy, Thanx :)
@Anonymous: Dont know wat made u comment like that. But FYI, the theme is the original creation of my mind, and so r the words of my pen. Also, if u wanna make a smart-ass comment like that... atleast show ur true identity.
me being shreyas fan, think you must accept she was your inspiration
@anonymous: Haha :)) Now I know...! Must say, wah kya pankhagiri hai :P
Btw, shreya's "Sarlaben", is that wat u r talking of? Well that was/is a classic, and this one is not by far close to it. I've told her that too.
And yaa, if u knew keeping wat in mind I've written this one, and the subtle hidden meaning behind these words... u wud also agree to it that its no way even close to her story/poem. Newy, justifying this further wud do injustice to my ode!
Life can show you the finger but you still have the power to influence her to dance on your footsteps
- Sal
@vivek: Thanx :) U got it buddy, Bingo!!!
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