Thursday, March 09, 2006

Those Blues

Again it is that feeling of hollow
Sees me smile, turns around
leaving me alone, on what ground
my heart sinking, days to follow.

Again I feel the need to sigh
Sees me lost, doesnt pay heed
hug me close, I feel the need
wish for wings, I could fly high.

Again they show their back to me
See me away, still no care
sulk I go, this feeling cant bear
O'lord! I wanna break free.

Again it feels those moments burrow
They nice to me, or just illusive
the fun together, dint long live
I search for a brighter tomorrow.

Again I ask this to me
Is it those old blues
or just different hues?
a voice from within, "Dont know why it be"

Again and again and again...


Anonymous pranjal said...

nice poem...
waise this time it was at 3pm instead of am!

1:04 PM, March 09, 2006  
Blogger kavin said...

Good poem indeed, yaar comment likhne ko bhi sharam aati hai...idhar comment section main bhi sab poets hai...
Newys good work...

2:40 PM, March 09, 2006  
Blogger SAL said...

@Pranjal: Thanx :) Dint know u read my blog too ;) Btw, this was also penned down at 1:30 am , just was too lazy to reach the comp to key it in.

@Kavin: Thanx dude! Dont worry, I guess u rap too good, which most of us cant ;)

3:57 PM, March 09, 2006  
Blogger green-eyed goblin said...

@ Sal....Keep on going for you know not where the hues lead....horizon ends but dusk seeps in,
The morning rays will soon peep out you know, joy after that will always follow!

7:32 PM, March 09, 2006  
Blogger SAL said...

@green eyed goblin : Those were really kind & inspiring words. This heart shall wait, for the sun to shine :)

8:17 PM, March 09, 2006  
Blogger gIftoFwIngs said...

lets tlk abt some greens :P

9:28 PM, March 09, 2006  
Blogger SAL said...

@gIftoFwIngs: 'greens' ;-)

9:36 PM, March 09, 2006  
Blogger gIftoFwIngs said...

@sal- yeah try somethin - 'these greens' ;)) but unlike 'how green was my valley' !

10:01 PM, March 09, 2006  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

life is all ups and downs. Only ups are no fun ... right? :) So you might feel a need to sigh .. but always keep your spirits high, if we had answers for everything, well, life ould be no fun to live in

11:47 PM, March 09, 2006  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

It would be 'again I ask this to THEE'... 'thy' is a possessive pronoun.

5:37 AM, March 10, 2006  
Blogger SAL said...

@anon: Normal usage in poetry:
thy = "me"
thou,thee = "you"

Guess I used it right... since I ask myself. Wat say? Correct me if I'm wrong.

8:34 AM, March 10, 2006  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

got to say you are in love, if your head denies it listen to your heart and you will get the answer.
wishing you and your Mr X good luck

9:51 AM, March 10, 2006  
Blogger SumEDh said...

your poems are getting difficult to comprehend day by day. ek do hafte baad, padhne ka bhi try nahi karoonga...coz kuch jhepega hi nahi.

11:42 AM, March 10, 2006  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Nope. "thy" is a second-person possessive pronoun.
Let me quote from romeo and juliet.
"O Romeo, Romeo! wherefore art thou Romeo? Deny THY father and refuse THY name; ... Romeo, doff THY name"

In colloquial vernacular (spoken english) this would read:
"O Romeo, Romeo! wherefore are you Romeo? Deny your father and refuse your name..."

12:13 PM, March 10, 2006  
Blogger SAL said...

@anonymous: advice...humm! Abt love, its for me to know & u to guess ;)

@Sumedh: C'mon its not that difficult to comprehend this one

@anonymous: My bad, just read more abt it... But me = me in shakespeare language...changing it :)

12:23 PM, March 10, 2006  
Blogger Yasser Rahman said...

Well....your thinking, thinking a little too fast..slow down, relax, listen to yourself...

follow your gut , lest you will have to swollow it :P

2:51 PM, March 10, 2006  
Blogger SAL said...

@Yasser Rahman:
Wat gives u the right to comment in this manner? Newy, 1st learn to spell swallow... before you have to swallow those words back

3:18 PM, March 10, 2006  
Anonymous ss said...

i believe it's always one of the old blues that keep showing up in different hues...very nicely written..

7:08 PM, March 10, 2006  
Blogger SAL said...

@ss: Thanx :)

11:06 PM, March 10, 2006  
Anonymous Kaushik said...

Hi Jaaaaaaaaaan
These days U write well and V are proud of our Multi talented Daughty (naughty)
Now think of changing your profession to Literature lol @};-
kaushik & pauravi
Dad & Mom

9:45 PM, March 11, 2006  
Blogger Kaushal said...

Good one Sal,

Looks like koi 'puraanaa ghaav' phir se ubhar rahaa hain...

10:57 PM, March 11, 2006  
Blogger Vivek said...

please do rewrite it... for rhyme seems forced at places... grief, we know, is overused in poetry, and one must work harder to express it nicely (I fail to do a good job all the time as well)

5:55 AM, March 20, 2006  

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